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Genre: Adult Contemporary Fiction with fantastical elements
Word Count: 80,000
Dear Wish-list Agent:
I am currently seeking representation for my novel LOGOS, Contemporary Fiction with fantastical elements –in the vein of Mr. Penumbra’s 24-Hour Bookstore.
Keep it hidden. Keep it safe. Eve promised her grandfather thirteen years ago, right before he vanished. She keeps her word. But the moment she touches the Sumerian stone is like sending a personal ad to every alien on the planet and downloads a map into her brain. The map leads to a source of unlimited alien power locked away in the Garden of Eden–the same energy crackling through her.
Now she senses sentient energy embedded in artifacts. Like a genie trapped in a bottle, these souls are being harvested by the Kenosi, corrupted beings intent on returning to their god-like status. These alien weapons are capable of turning Rome to dust.
This Light calls to her begging to be free. She would love nothing more than to fulfill, to squash the loneliness plaguing her since childhood. But her new soul-searing power didn’t come with instructions.
Aliens, human half-breeds, soulless beings, and an order of Persian assassins want Eve. Some want her soul, some want her dead, and others just want her. Having handsome powerful men chase after her is one thing, but this attention she could do without.
Then there’s what the Light is doing to her. Manifesting Light swords is a neat trick, but being burned alive from the inside out isn’t a price she wants to pay.
Eve must learn to wield her new powers in time to stop a soul-fueled bomb from leveling The Vatican. But saving the innocent may open a gate, giving the Kenosi exactly what they want, absolute tyranny like they had in the days of Pharaoh. How can she stay hidden and safe when she is the key?
LOGOS is complete at 80,000 words and is the first in a planned series. The real life disappearance of my husband’s uncle after he boarded a plane thirty years ago, later featured on Unsolved Mysteries was the inspiration for my novel.
My short stories have been featured in Go Read Your Lunch, The Idaho Magazine, and I am a contributing writer for The Urban Liaison Magazine.
First 250 words:
Somehow, I had completed the transatlantic journey my grandfather hadn’t. Not that I expected to disappear mid-flight, but it had happened before.
The wheels touching down nearly spilled the last swallow of a bottomless cup of red. I eyed the plane’s emergency exit for the last time knowing the metal tomb with wings wouldn’t have me this time. A warm haze engulfed me somewhere over the Atlantic thanks to a generous flight attendant pouring the liquid sedative. Raising my glass, I toasted the wine gods for delivering me safely. Then downed the last of it.
My airline-assigned friend shifted in her seat away from me. Her face pinched with disgusted. What’s her deal? As inconspicuously as I could I put my nose to my armpit. Reeling back with a cough, I wished I could scoot away too. My deodorant had quit. Strong enough for a man and yet retreating from the tropical storm bleeding through my white shirt.
I hate quitters!
The overhead bell rang and phones lit up throughout the cabin as though turning on our electronic devices was part of the disembarking process. I didn’t expect a call, and I didn’t have a call to make, but having it on made me feel less alone.
My phone chimed. My heart stuttered. I could only think of one person who might call me, and she hadn’t been coherent for more than a year. The last time she called she’d stolen an orderly’s phone to remind me to feed her cat.
She never owned a cat.